Need communications help to check my essay. Correct my Grammar errors and modify my essay.

Need communications help to check my essay. Correct my Grammar errors and modify my essay.

final pro.docx

Attach my file. Read it carefully. 

Rewrite TWO paragraph of my essay. 

Correct my grammar error and develop the structure of my essay. 

This is my final project, it need to be perfect. I am not American, I want my essay can be write like native students.